Den of the Beastly Bear
Hi Folks!
We're gonna try something a little different tonight.
I was chatting with Kathy over at The Giggling Truckers Wife Writes. She asked if I'd edit something she wrote, give her my take and make any suggestions that struck me. I was once again deeply honored that she would ask little ole me to do such a thing, as I think SHE is brilliant! She was writing a 100-word short story to a picture prompt. She had already written a great story, but it was too long. She kicked around a couple ideas with me, maybe changing her take. She settled on a rewrite of her initial idea, and it's a good one! You can find it at the link above.
But our discussion was rolling around in my head, and I started writing my own little story for the prompt in my head...and thought "I should write this down.". I however, did not follow the 100-word restriction as I wasn't doing the challenge.
So, here is my foray into short fiction using the same picture as Kathy. You have her to blame...
Hope you enjoy.
High School sweethearts, they'd been together through 20 years and two kids, good times. But that was over now, and never would be again. It was the affair....
So for their anniversary she rented a room by the sea. His favorite wine and they'd make love one last time before she told him she knew. She loved him so much, it was the only way she could let him go.
But our discussion was rolling around in my head, and I started writing my own little story for the prompt in my head...and thought "I should write this down.". I however, did not follow the 100-word restriction as I wasn't doing the challenge.
So, here is my foray into short fiction using the same picture as Kathy. You have her to blame...
Hope you enjoy.
Sunset
As Jane poured the last of the wine into her glass, she stared out at the setting sun and wiped away a tear. She thought it a metaphor for her relationship with Dave, who lay motionless in the bed where they'd just made love. For the very last time.
High School sweethearts, they'd been together through 20 years and two kids, good times. But that was over now, and never would be again. It was the affair....
An intern, barely out of college. Wide-eyed and so impressed with him, he thought she didn't know.
So for their anniversary she rented a room by the sea. His favorite wine and they'd make love one last time before she told him she knew. She loved him so much, it was the only way she could let him go.
So when it was over and he lay drowsy and spent, she got up for more wine.
Her purse was right there, and she asked over her shoulder "Were you thinking of her?"
"What are you talking about?" He asked hesitantly.
"I said, were you thinking of her?" She said slowly as she turned and leveled the revolver at his chest.
Her purse was right there, and she asked over her shoulder "Were you thinking of her?"
"What are you talking about?" He asked hesitantly.
"I said, were you thinking of her?" She said slowly as she turned and leveled the revolver at his chest.
The windows were open and she could hear them coming, a distant wail over the crash of waves. Everyone's windows were open, a gentle breeze blew in off the ocean so she was sure everyone had heard. She finished her wine, raised the gun to her head and looking out on the last sunset of her life. Joined him in the next.
Well, there you have it...something a little different from your friendly neighborhood Beastly Bear. Please let me know what you think...I am truly interested.
Be Well Folks,
Beastly Bear
